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oh charlie, pets are your friends

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Periods and commas still missing in some places. Capital letters needed at start of sentences. 
Panel 1: "Get her off!*" x2
Panel 1: "Okay,* Penny, I think that's enough tough love."
Panel 2: "Tough* love he says.*"
Panel 3: I think there's a double space between "see" and "hate" in that first speech bubble as well as a missing period. 
Panel 3: What does Charlie mean by "I'm going to be late for the publish"? Is that supposed to be... like... a publishing event? I don't think the single word "publish" works in that context. Might also want to add commas after "look" and "publish" (or the fixed equivalent of it) in that sentence, since they separate ideas. 
Panel 4: "Well,* don't forget to grab your books.*"
Panel 4: "Sorry for any trouble*"
Might also want to watch out for the words popping out of the word balloons, since the last speech bubble on that page does that here. That shouldn't be happening unless there's an in-narrative reason for it to happen.